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Marla:
- Superb story! I immensely enjoyed the complexity of feelings you've caught here--the tangle of relationships that bind enemies to enemies and the past to the present. Ragnhilh, Ajeya, and Saavik are powerfully--and realistically--portrayed. There is an excellent sense of connection here, from Romulan mother to sisters to grandson--even unwilling and brilliantly painful as it is. Rahnhilh has the promising courage of Saavik--and the single hope of returning another kind of Sundering to one House. A superb story.
Joanna:
- Really good. Is this your first story? It is very Romulan that the sister has a respect for Saavik in spite of her being a Fed, hybrid, abberation, etc.
Mnei'sahe is a great concept that I like to play with. I'm sure that
Ragnhilh did as mnei'sahe would have required. I think that the whole crew
would have understood why they had to let Saavik go. I like that the concept
is both given proudly and/or grudgingly/reluctantly, but is to the Romulans what Duty is to the Vulcans.
I like that in the end Setik is reunited as Ragnhilh was with her mother and the contrast/similarities in the two reunions.
Good Job!
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