I love it. I was jumping in my seat the whole time! And let me say right now, I want to see the Babel story!
I liked the language, the pacing, and the way it all came together -- the Guardian, the historian, and how Saavik came to be in Amanda's time. And I always had a clear
idea of what was going on and how Saavik was feeling.
>A footfall, the sound of its weight and tread familiar to her... safe.
I like how she equates safe w/ Spock, and even w/ that footfall, she calls out to him.
>But Amanda, Saavik reminded herself before blacking out again, was dead.
I love it!! what a great prologue!!!
>"T'Pring!" The voice was firm now, commanding.
>"T'Pring," Saavik whispered. "Yes, T'Pring. After all, who else would be calling for Spock as her husband?"
Kerry, you are so evil!
>So I know it's very much my Spock you called for earlier, even if I can't explain the rest of this.
Oh, poor Saavik. Think how much she would want to alter and can't.
>She tried making connections, but her brain refused, preferring to focus on things like how different Amanda looked, dusty and dirty in her sandsuit.
I like how she wants to see Amanda, not matter what time or how she is!
"You're an adult, T'Pring, and most likely, you know I first opposed your and Spock's betrothal. Not because of you personally. I -- questioned any such match. You've
shown me my objection was wrong, and I -am- gratified by that."
oh, damn! No, Amanda, no! It's so touching that Saavik never jumps up and screams "I'm not T'Pring!"
>I must have told you by now how much Sarek and I wanted a daughter." A few drops of her perspiration fell into the open gash, the salt a sharp sting, but it's not what
caused Saavik's caught breath.
Oh, god... Kerry, i hate you. you're so good at this!
>"Mother." Amanda's voice was flat. "You're leaving." Saavik looked down at her. "Yes."
This is so sad!! And unfair!
>Amanda watched her, eyes flicking back and forth. Then she smiled. "I won't say goodbye."
That's so Amanda-like!
I applaud you. Thank you for adding more to the ending!! I especially loved the part where Spock said how the historian did harm to Saavik --
and you just know how much he wanted to go in after her, and accidentally stumble across Amanda.
That was beautifully written --- and once again, we see how much Saavik has to sacrifice. She couldn't even give Amanda a *hint*. You know, if Saavik had left Amanda
some sort of memory, she would have accompanied Sarek and Spock on the Hellguard rescue mission, and then probably would have raised Saavik herself.