- There are no words...wonderfully done. Praise to you for this tasteful and touching
piece. It brought tears to my eyes and amazment to my heart...your story filled in the
blanks of how our beloved crew weathered what we all know would have been a devastating blow.
- Wow. Loaded with great characterization right down to the bone. This really should have been shown in Generations, and it's a crime that it wasn't. Not since "The Family Line" by A Christopher Drown have I read a praise worthy Star Trek fic. Most are pure crap but this rises above them right to the top, just like cream. ;)
- Very good. It's about time we saw the reactions of Captain
Kirk's fellow officers. Well done. I thought the characterizations
were completely accurate and I'm glad that Saavik was
- This is by far the best of the post-Kirk-death stories
that I've yet read. You do an excellent job with the characters
and draw the emotions together very well. I would actually
like to see a follow-up, I.E. the speeches etc, but at
the same time wonder if you could do justice to what you've
already done. I have always thought it unfortunate that
Paramount needed to prove the quality of the sequel by
denying Captain Kirk such a ceremony in 'Generations',
but certainly wish that they'd taken the extra ten minutes
at the end of the movie as it would have given the series
the closure that movie most certainly didn't. A great
job in trying to fill this hole.
- Great story. Very in-character. I especially like your
characterization of Saavik.
Debbie P. White:
- Thank You. I would have loved to see this story on film.
It would have been a fitting eulogy to Deforest Kelly
(McCoy). It is a must for any true fan of the Star Trek
worlds, and Gene would be proud to see his legacy continue
with the really talented writers such as you. Again thank
- Great! Great! I could just hear everyone's voice as
they said those things! That was so good, so true to the
characters! It's not often that I see a fic I can say
this about, so you are part of a very select group of
- This was so SAD! It made my eyes go all teary. Amazingly
written, though, and I think the author did a wonderful
job in representing all the characters. I only wish there
was more to it!
- What a story! I was so touched! It seemed so proper
and respectful of a Captain that they all followed. Perhaps
you could continue it with each of them reading their
letters and viewing the tape. I enjoyed how they all supported
each other. They were all in character blaming themselves.
The strong yet weak emotions going through all of them.
The deep caring that made the Enterprise crew so special.
The man they mourned would keep them together even through
death. I did not want your story to end. I still don't.
I feel myself mourning the special character that was
and is Jim Kirk to all of us. Your story touched me as
few have not. Thank you for such a thought provoking story.
- How the hell did you write something so god dam brilliant?
The way you weaved the character's emotions into an intricate
web of grief and discovery truely amazing. Your portrayal
of Saavik is awe inspiring. The inner thoughts of the
crew are realistic and well scripted.
- Saavik's vulnerability and isolation, how her priority
is Spock and Kirk recognizes what they mean to each other,
even if it's unacknowledged, hence his message to her.
Okay, so what is it that Kirk knew, but Saavik won't share
with Uhura? Information, please. You have to write that
one! And the other background- Saavik at the ball, getting
her citizenship, the hybrid disease- provides depth and
asks to be told on it's own!
- Wow... that's all I can say.
- I just read your story, Mourning. It made me cry. You're
a great writer! I loved the descriptions, and how each
time you really caught what they would have felt and what
it would be like for them. Truly awesome.
- I re-read Mourning yesterday. I think I must have read this when I
first discovered your site and not since.
Reading it again made me appreciate how it draws all your work
together. Reading it now makes me appreciate how well written it is;
something I took for granted before I started writing myself. It was a
daring attempt to write so many different characters in the first
person in one piece. Each characterization is well captured and flows
into the next smoothly. Saavik's interaction with the characters
throughout the piece binds it all together beautifully.